Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home,leisure and work activities. To what extend do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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advantages
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the advantages
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of information technology. In our
society
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our life depends on new
technologies
. Let's talk about examples, even simple shopping is changed in
this
century . In the earlier
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people had to go to the malls and
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buys things that they needed in cash.
Fortunatelly
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, in our
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century
we do not have to go to any malls or borrow any money , even credit cards are not necessary . We can order everything on the Internet and they deliver products that you ordered to your home . You can get things with
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just one click without going
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home. And you can use these
technologies
for educational purposes. In
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last
years
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it really helped
for
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many students from many different countries . By Covid 19 many educational places
such
as universities , colleges , even schools could not study offline . And in these times many new
technologies
like Google Meet or Zoom etc. helped us to continue our educational development .
However
, everything has
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and
disadvantage
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affects . And in
this
case information
technologies
are not perfect . Many
technologies
like
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a laptop
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laptop
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laptops
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, mobile
phone
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phones
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and other
softwares
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software
like these have bad effects
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humans
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health. If we just may go back for a moment, before inventing
techologies
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technologies
many people did not wear any glasses and they had not poor eyesight . And most people did not suffer from
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. These are disadvantages of information
technologies
. In conclusion, if scientists
develope
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develop
developed
technologies
in the nearly future , it will be
great
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a great
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invention in humans history .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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