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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now `one big traffic jam`. How true do you think this statment is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Automobile possession has risen so fastly along the previous thirty years that
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plenty of cities
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 the earth are now one big
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 congestions. In fact, it is
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 statement, because nowadays each person has their own car. The car industry and people`s desire to buy a machine is growing day by day.
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 large number of cars leads to their congestion. In my opinion,
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 , one key solution for the problem is
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public transport
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. But, in many countries,
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 is not convenient and too expensive.
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 why people still prefer to take their own cars rather than by bus.
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, the government must increase the facilities of nation
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 as per the need of the population.
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, ensuring the movement of bicycles, which are beneficial to human health. By the way,
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 approach is comfortable only for those close to the workplace, those who are far from the workplace of course use a car or bus.
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 a view can
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 be used to reduce congestion in a certain sense. To conclude,
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 jam is often a serious problem in big cities. It is less noticeable in developing countries. People should try to use public
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 to stop
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 congestion.
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jam
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 during very busy hours on the road can be reduced and more people can get to work on time and avoid the frustration caused by sitting in the middle of a long line of machines.
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