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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes for example working for charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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The achievement of a carrier starts from having a different works experience. A vast number of people think that free community service
such
 as working for the charity, developing the neighbourhood and learning sports at high school should be a portion of temporary basic maternity. I totally agree with
this
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 I will argue about the charity topic.
Firstly
, a charity job is the best way to add a good personal statement to the CV while applying for the job.
Secondly
, that Could
also
 help pupils to earn experiment without pay anything
then
, they can easily practise more and take ideas in social life.
In addition
, volunteering in some local library assist youth to communicate with other
for example
, making good relationship, obtaining variant skills in many interesting fields and enjoying when giving aid to visitors.
On the other hand
, younger adults have a lot of diverse significant subjects at school, they are
also
 under pressure at weekends to solve their homework.
Moreover
, free time is essential to a clean mind and help the brain to concentrate before studying.
however
, working for free can be the worst option rather than good for poor students in order to many social circumstances , which makes huge trouble for the student with low salaries or have to pay for rent as well as, for those who move to another country and need a job to support their financial. To conclude, despite several reasons of working without money can create some life difficulties for some of them. I completely encourage
this
 opinion to improve pupils life skills and definitely grow their carrier.
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