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Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Numerous scientists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. In my opinion, there are only benefits
playing
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 musical
instruments
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.
Initially
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, listening to
music
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, singing or playing musical
instruments
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 can give us an amazing mood. After school
children
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 should listen to
music
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, sing,dance or play
own
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their own
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 favourite musical
instruments
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. They can enjoy doing it. They can go an additional course to learn dancing, singing or playing musical
instruments
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.
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, schools have a perfect subject -
music
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. In my own experience,when I studied at school my
favorite
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favourite
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 subject was
music
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, because in that lesson we could relax. We could sing our
favorite
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favourite
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 songs.
Teacher
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The teacher
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 was just a fantastic woman. She taught us to love
music
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. In conclusion, I totally agree with
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 statement.
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, parents should give a chance for
children
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 to choose their future job and they should be interested in their
children
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 in
music
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 . In my opinion,
music
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 - must be
childrens'
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a childrens'
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 hobby.
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, in the future
children
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, who love
music
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,when they are likely to be an adult,
music
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maybe
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may be
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 their
second
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 profession. After doing their work, they can play musical
instruments
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 and earn extra money . If someone wants to be rich,
that is
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 the best way.
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