Increasing the price of patrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? What other measures do you think might be effective.

We know that
transportation
is one of the most crucial
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that we have to pay attention
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of
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apply
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it
related
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with
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to
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traffic and
pollution
.
However
there is have
alternative
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an alternative
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way to decrease that problem, control
price
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the price
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of fuel is one of them. Another
strategies
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that we can do is add more quantity of public transport. It seems
price
patrol is not the only
one
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apply
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causes of the problem, but
also
we have to know why people choose to
using
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private
transportation
rather than public transport. Normally people already calculate how much cost that they have to spend every month just
for
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transportation
, and it
is depends
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on
price
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the price
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of petrol. If the
price
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isprice
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more expensive than using
train
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a train
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or bus, they will choose to
using
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that.
for
example
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in
Indonesia
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they increase the
price
of petrol
30
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%, the result in 3 months traffic congestion and
pollution
lower 10% from
previous
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the previous
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month. But
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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also
provide
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another alternative rather than using their car. The solution that
goverment
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government
provide is, they add more number of busses, train, and monorail.
As a
result
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30%
percent
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number of
population
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the population
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choose to
using
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use
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public transport rather than private
transportation
. As a fact from the statistic report by Timenews media in
october
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1975 people 65% correspondent, their reason using public
transportation
is because ontime and cheaper. some of them
also
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said to
decrese
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decrease
pollution
.
As
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conclution
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conclusion
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increased
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increase
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,increase
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fuel
price
is not enough to handle traffic and
pollution
issue
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issues
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. We have to add more
solution
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solutions
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.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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