Educating young people is naturally important. However, some think governments ught to invest more education for adults in need. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Education plays a role of like backbone in every human
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life. Some people believe that state government should allocate their budget to educate
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generation while others argue that oldsters should become a priority target who receives the learning process. I accord myself with
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extent that education is most important for
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. In upcoming
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my pertinent notions will be explicated.
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life from
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authorities should prepare their human resources appropriately
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providing many suitable programmes to encourage them
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an expert in their variety of subjects.
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experiences which can elevate human
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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