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Some people think that governments should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily. Do you agree or disagree? What other methods could be used to reduce air traffic?

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Over the recent years, the popularity of
air
 services is in
tremoundes
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rebounds
 demand, there are hundreds of flights available each day in every part of the world. I disagree that it should be more heavily taxable.
Although
, there are
few
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a few
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 methods
which
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that
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 can be helpful to make
air
traffic
 in control.
Firstly
, it will directly affect the local
travelers
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travellers
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. There are many people who live
in
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abroad apart from their families, so
air
traveling
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 is the only mode of transport for them to reunite with their families. If the ticket prices get high
then
 it can be difficult for the passengers to afford it.
Moreover
, not only
this
 can affect the local businesses who work under different airlines, but it
also
 impacts the jobs of several employees who work for that firms. Imposing taxes can be sometimes lead to
end
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 of many businesses and both passengers and businesses can get affected by it. Methods can be implemented to reduce
air
traffic
, as there are flights available even to
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nearby
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near by
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nearby
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 cities which can
also
 be
traveled
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travelled
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 by cars or trains; they can be avoided and passengers can use different
traveling
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travelling
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 methods to reach their destinations. Moving
further
,
Air
traveling
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travelling
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 companies must maintain records to allow the number of flights per day to fly.
In addition
 to
this
,
air
traveling
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travelling
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 can be controlled by reducing all unwanted rocket experiments that
takes
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 place
everyday
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, the amount of pollution they give it is more harmful
then
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than
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 what one single
airplane
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aeroplane
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 gives when it travels. In conclusion, not only
taxing
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does taxing
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 on
air
traffic
 affects individuals, but it
also
impact
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on
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many working firms more effectively.
Therefore
, I disagree that government should reduce
air
traffic
 by using
method
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the method
a method
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 of tax.
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