Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some
people
are comfortable with the actions and experiences they have learned in
life
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Such
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are not interested in new and modern things.
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lives will more adventurous.
On the other hand
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avoiding change, by embracing changes in our
life
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can bring
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of advantage. One is that
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people
can experience new things in their
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traveling
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abroad rather than spending our
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same country can create unforgettable moments in our
life
. In my opinion, I would argue that alterations in some activities and practices are essential to achieving progress and success.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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