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Many people agree that free public transportation should be available in most major cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this idea?

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According to many, public
transportation
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 should be free for everyone in all urban cities. It will encourage people to switch from private vehicles to public buses, trains and trams.
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, as a drawback, a more burden will occur on taxpayers. Due to the increasing
use
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 of private cars for travelling, air pollution has increased and it has become a major problem in many big cities as well. If public
transportation
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 is made cost-free, it will not only motivate commuters to
use
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 it ,but
also
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it
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will reduce traffic congestion and pollution problems.
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, in Switzerland, many prefer to
use
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 local trams to travel because of the cost-free route made by its
government
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.
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, no charge on public commuting means
low quality
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 service. To clarify, the cost for the maintenance of public
transportation
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 comes mainly from the travel money paid by users, but when it is made chargeless, the services provided by them will decrease eventually.
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, to cover up maintenance charges, the
government
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 will ask for more tax from taxpayers. In India, before the
election
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 the
government
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 announced a discount on train travel to get popular votes from citizens, but many did not notice until the
government
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 raised the tax rate to fix the loss from
discounted
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the discounted
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 price. In conclusion, free
transportation
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 may be a solution for environmental problems and a motive for its increasing
use
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. At the same time, it can be costly
on
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 others who pay
tax
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taxes
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 to the
government
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.
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