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Countries should produce the food that their population eats, and import as little as possible. To what extent do agree and disagree? Give reasons, examples to you answer.

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In current days, it is common that
countries
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import
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to import
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 food
products
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 from other foreign
countries
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.
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, Japan imports various fruit
products
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 from Taiwan.
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 raises
us
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a
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whether
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countries
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 should buy
foods
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 from other
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 or they should produce food
products
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by
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on
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 their own as
many
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much
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 as possible. In the following, I will offer my view. Some argue that
countries
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 should not rely on imported
foods
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; rather, they should produce
foods
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by
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on
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 their own via manufacturing or farming.
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' stable development since they will not be
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affected
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effected
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affected
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 by other
countries
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 easily.
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, if the output
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 are in financial
crsis
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crisis
crises
, they may raise the
products
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' prices. In
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countries
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 that import too many food
prodcuts
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products
 may spend a large sum of money on those
products
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.
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, they have to cut off their expenditure on other
stuffs
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,
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 as infrastructure, education, or medicine,
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 detrimental to their own development.
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, I think for some small
countries
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; they are hard to produce
foods
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by
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 their own. An
exemplar
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 is Singapore.
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samll
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small
 country does not have
enoguh
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enough
 land and population to
develope
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develop
 their own farming industry.
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, they primarily focus on providing financial services, which need not land and population, to other
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.
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, the Singapore government does not really have a choice. It can only import
foods
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 from other
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 for the consumption of
their
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 citizens. In short, I agree that
countries
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 producing
foods
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by
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on
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 their own
is
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advantage
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 to their development. Yet, in some special cases, purchasing
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 from other nations is unavoidable.
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, at least for those particular cases, I think that
countries
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 do not have obligation to produce
foods
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by
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 their own.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-sufficiency
  • trade dependency
  • food security
  • sustainable agriculture
  • local economies
  • carbon footprint
  • supply chain
  • food miles
  • agricultural sector
  • domestic production
  • import substitution
  • food sovereignty
  • global supply chains
  • trade imbalances
  • food standards
  • economic resilience
  • biodiversity
  • cultural heritage
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