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Many believe that living in a city offers greater benefits compared to life in the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#city #life #countryside
Nowadays, choosing where one can live to have
better
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 future has raised many arguments. Some people believe that
cities
 provide much more positive points for their residents while others opine that rural areas would be appropriate places. I, personally, agree with the former one and in forthcoming
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 I shall clean my thoughts.
To begin
 with,
cities
 especially metropolitan
cities
 offer a wide range of opportunities for ones' improvement. To explain
this
, many job opportunities
offering
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 by big companies would be available for city dwellers. Take "Digikala" and "
Irancel
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Irancell
" as well-paid firms which are located in
capital
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 of Iran and as a job requirement they hire individuals who live within a close distance of their central offices. What is more, almost all qualified educational
centers
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 have been situated in modern
cities
.
This
 definitely
lead
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 to
brighter
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 future for those ones who can benefit from
such
 a beneficial academic environment. Schools and universities not only have experienced staff who could develop
talents
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 of pupils
at
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a
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 right way
,
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 but
also
 they have been equipped with up-to-minute devices. All these advantages would contribute to
broaden
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 ones' horizon and
rise
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raise
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 their awareness.
In addition
, people in
cities
 could be
more
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healthier. To explicate, there have been a number of outstanding health
centers
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centres
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 in
such
 places. Facilities including equipped hospitals and gyms shall boost
individuals
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individuals'
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 well-being. City residents could check their health conditions frequently via getting reliable tests in nearby laboratories and enjoy exercising by enrolling in different types of gyms in every vicinity.
However
, it is argued that living in
a
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 countryside offers some positive points,
such
 as
relaxed
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a relaxed
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 lifestyle,
use
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 organic foods, clean air. In conclusion,
although
 living in
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a
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rustic environment have some benefits, the great opportunities which are offered in cosmopolitan
cities
 are something that could not be ignored.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
  • ecological footprint
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