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Write about the following topic: Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

#topic #group #students #classroom #home #minutes
It is often argued that obtaining an
education
 in
classroom
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 has more advantages over
the
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remote learning at
home
. I
disagrees
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 with the statement because online learning at
home
 is more affordable and
time saving
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time-saving
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.
First
 of all, online studies are beneficial in context to affordability. These days tuition fees of schools and tertiary
education
 are on a surge.
As a result
, parents
finds
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 it difficult to manage these heavy fees.
However
, in the case of remote learning parents can
enroll
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 their children in affordable overseas universities at minimal expenses.
In addition
, the quality of
education
 they gain is far
more
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superior
than
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to
classroom
education
. A recent study concluded that online
education
 offered by the top universities are half of the tuition fees to
classroom
 ones.
Therefore
,
students
 can
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their dreams of gaining
quailty
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quality
education
 at limited expenses.
Secondly
, online
education
prove
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proves
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 advantageous for the
students
 in saving
time
. Most of the
students
 travel
from
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long distances to reach their schools and universities. Whereas, in remote
learning
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,learning
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students
 can study at
home
 which saves ample
time
, which can be used to study and relax.
This
 leads to
increase
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an increase
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 in the academic performance of
students
.
For instance
, in India, it is estimated that
average
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an average
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 number of hours
students
 spend on commute are 20 hours
weekely
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weekly
.
Thus
, utilizing
this
time
 plays a pivotal role in their studies. In
conclsuion
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conclusion
, I disagree with the statement that
classroom
 coaching with fellow
students
 outweighs
the
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remote learning at
home
 because online learning offers numerous positive aspects in terms of saving tuition
fee
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fees
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 and conserving vital
time
 of commuting, to studies.
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