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The world of work is changing rapidly and people cannot depend on the same job or the same conditions of work for life. Discuss the possible causes for these changes and give your suggestions on how people should prepare for work

#world #work #people #job #conditions #life #changes #suggestions
Having a proper
job
 that can
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man’s
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 basic needs has been assumed vital in all societies. People should adapt to
new
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the new
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circumstance
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circumstances
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 of
job
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the job
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market
 due to the fact that today’s
work
 world is not stabilized. But what problems do
this
 conversion
?
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This
 essay will discuss the reasons behind
this
 condition and, will put forward several efficient solutions to manage
this
 trend. The
first
 and obviously most significant reason
to
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this
 issue is the pace of development of technology.
Undoubtable
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Undoubtedly
evidences
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evidence
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 support the fact that
although
 new technologies have been making jobs easier and safer, quick progress of them have led to a permanent requirement for
workers
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workers'
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 updated skills. Take the case of banking, which is strongly affected by Defi services. Another possible reason is the competition to get better positions. It is widely accepted that population increase has brought about a shortage of demands for
favorable
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 jobs.
For instance
, in
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 a large number of construction
labors
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 have had
serious
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problem
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problems
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to find
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a
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constant
work
 during the year. For the above-mentioned points, fast advancement of technology along with
growth
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the growth
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 of population are the main reasons behind variability status in today’s
labor
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market
. The
first
 solution to address
this
 issue certainly is getting adequate education based on
market
 requests. In fact, having suitable skills rise the chance of individuals to find
satisfactory
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position
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. A good example of
this
 clime
are
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 football coaches, who need to
be
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update
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updated
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 in their profession to maintain their jobs. The
second
 considerable answer to
this
 question is flexibility in
current
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 occupation. It can be told that today’s competitive
work
 areas
need
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 to do somewhat normally has been out of employees’
job
 description. Research in an Indian university has shown that 26% of
staffs
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staff
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 of private companies should do extra tasks more than their fixed duties to keep their
job
. Based on solutions
cited-above
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, had workers developed essential proficiency and
their
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flexibility,
firstly
 they would have found
favorable
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favourable
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 positions
secondly
, their adaptability in their occupations would have increased. Today some can not stay in a permanent
job
 for a long time because of
fast
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the fast
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 variable
condition
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conditions
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 of
work
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the work
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market
.
This
 essay discussed two crucial causes of unreliable
work
market
 conditions and, elucidated a couple of solutions to manage
this
 problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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