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Some say that for any country hosting an international sports event such as the Olympic Games is costly, inefficient and is a waste of money, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#say #country #sports #event #olympic #games #waste #money
With the increasing popularity of
sports
 entertainment, many countries are willing to host these events, but at the same
time
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 some people believe that It is expensive and requires a lot of effort. In
this
essay
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 we will discuss both the views and give our opinion as to why it is a burden to citizens of the hosting
country
 as well as a boon to its economy. When international
sports
 events are held, the economy of that
country
 gets boosted. As tourism
also
 plays an important role in the economic development of a nation,
such
sports
 programmes attract millions of tourists from many countries. It will increase the sales in local
business
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such
 as cafes, restaurants, hotels, pubs, public transportation, domestic and international flights.
For instance
, according to a Times survey ,due to the Olympic games held in China in 2008, it received numerous visitors at that time which was never experienced before, since the 1960s when China started open trade business.
However
, conducting mass
sports
 entertainment comes with economic scrutiny to some countries. It's no doubt that a huge budget is spent on constructing the physical infrastructure for them which can be expensive to other development priorities of the
country
. Prior to Brazil World Cup 2014, many Brazilians protested against it because the cost
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 development stadiums were costing the daily lives of people as major government funds were allocated to it. In conclusion, great
sports
 events help the
country
 to be famous to the world and showcase its culture to the world.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 the responsibility of the government of the host
country
 to decide whether it really benefits.
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