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Nowadays crime movies, programmes and TV series are extremely popular. What do you think is the reason for this? What effects do these films have on our society? Give your own opinion and examples.

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With the wide access
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 digital devices,
people
 are more interested in digital pictures. Among them, the crime genre has become very famous because of its content presentation. It, no doubt, has a negative effect on society,
on the other
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 it is
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 responsibility of civilized
people
 to control them. One of the main reasons behind the popularity of
crime related
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 cinemas or series is the beautiful creation of suspense. Movie-goers are attracted in
such
 an enthusiastic way that, as every minute passes by, it does not let viewers' eyes be distracted in other directions. They,
also
, are acclaimed to collect enough profit. As per
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 tomatoes study, thriller serials are rated on average more than half out of five, which means they attract enough viewers while it is released. While the horror category is attracting many watchers, it is helping to increase crime in
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society.
People
 get to learn criminal ideas from watching it and they try to commit crimes based on those watched programs.
Similarly
, it has a mental effect on children of young age. Despite age
restriction
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, they get to watch it on TV or mobile devices.
Nonetheless
, it develops the mentality of
fearness
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fairness
fearless
 from the
people
 in society in the young minds. In conclusion,
although
 thriller digital content is popular among
people
, it is slowly affecting the immature minds of adults, creating
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criminals in the future.
Therefore
, in the name of entertainment, we have to be responsible that fictional dramas should not occur in reality in the community.
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