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On Halloween night,
Jason
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 and his
friends
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to
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go and visit the newly opened haunted
house
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 downtown. As
Jason
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 had never been to a
ghost
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house
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 before, he was very nervous but he decided not to show his fear in front of his
friends
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. As soon as they arrived at the entrance of the
ghost
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house
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,
Jason
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 was sure that he had made a mistake. The whole building was decorated with spider webs and plastic skeletons. To add to
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 creepy atmosphere, the
house
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 was illuminated by dark red light…just like blood, thought
Jason
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. “Are you afraid?” asked one of his
friends
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 jokingly as they entered the haunted
house
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. “Of course not
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” answered
Jason
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 with little enthusiasm. Deep down in his heart, he wished with all his might that he could be magically transported back
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home. Inside the building, the atmosphere was even scarier than what they had observed from outside. The whole room was dimly lit and a blanket of darkness stretched itself across the room. As they advanced
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 into
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 labyrinth of fear and terror,
Jason
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 felt something dripped on his feet. With horror, he jumped back and sighed with relief as he discovered that it was only water drops from the ceiling. Behind him, he could hear his
friends
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’ footsteps echoing in the dark, their whispered conversations, and soundtracks from horror films
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 in the background. But none of the sounds could suppress the sound of his own heartbeat, echoing in his ear like a monotonous song. All of a sudden,
Jason
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 felt someone tapping on his shoulder. Expecting to see his
friends
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, he turned around, but nothing could have prepared him for what he saw. Behind him stood a man in a
ghost
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 costume. His face was covered and he was holding a fake knife in his hand, with red dye dripping from the blade. At that point, his only thought was who should take the blame if he would die. He blamed himself for not staying at home and ignored his better judgement. On his
friends
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, for forcing him to be here. All of sudden,
Jason
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 started to scream. He couldn’t remember how he came out of the
ghost
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house
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. The only thing he could remember was that he screamed at the top of his lungs while running like a madman and his
friends
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’ laughter.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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