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It has been observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects at university. What do you think are the causes of the problem? What are the effects on society.

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It has been seen that very few
students
 are choosing to study
science
subjectsscience
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subjects science
subject science
 subjects at university.
This
 essay intends to delve into the reasons for
this
 trend and
also
 discuss what effects
this
 development has on societies. There are many reasons for the scarcity of interest in
science
. One of the most common is that the dynamic change of
science
 education they hardly found kind of teacher who is very us to date. areThey
moreover
 unwilling to know the updated
knowledge
 of
science
. For that
students
leg
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 behind in acquiring
knowledge
 for the future. When it is time to use their
knowledge
 they found what they learn already backdate and scarcity of practical
knowledge
 is
also
 responsible for not intended for that kind of
knowledge
.
moreover
 Only learning in a theoretical way
Science
 seemed very complicated. That's why
students
 are not getting stimulated to increase their motive for choosing
science
.
Furthermore
, Whenever it's time to choose a professional young people always like to accustomed with a popular, valued and challenging. That's why they usually want to be an artist, actor anchor, doctor or a lawyer. The reason why they choose
that is
 fame and money. It is considered that whenever it is time to give focus on invention or to be a scientist it's very hard to lead a life in the primary stage until are they able to succeed in the remaining field and in Many countries. There is no budget for scientific research. On the
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contrary some research is so much costly to bear by a scientist on their own is much difficult and keep incomplete. To sum up, there are many reasons for not participating in
science
 by
students
 and
this
 phenomenon shall definitely be detrimental for society.
Submitted by M.L.A on

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