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Question: More and more people are migrating to cities in search for a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can government make urban life better for everyone?

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The migration of
individuals
 to developed locations
such
 as cities in pursuit of favourable living
condition
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 is drastically overwhelming,
however
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 there is a likelihood that
considerable
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a considerable
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 proportion of people
are
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 deprived and denied
of
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meaningful expectancy.
Thus
,
this
 essay will discuss the gruelling prospect and
also
 render remedies government could adopt to ameliorate it. Transparently, densely populated locality encounters high cost of living in
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most sphere of infrastructures, overpopulation is a remarkable component of competition among residents which leads to
increase
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an increase
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 in the cost of living .
Furthermore
, extreme population contributes adversely to
pollution
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the pollution
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 which deteriorates
health
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the health
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 of people in the cities and minimizes life span.
Moreover
, overdependence and reliability on fossil fuel by enormous population results
to
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 scarcity of natural resources.
Also
, solitude
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 gravely
exert
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 much influence on
psychological
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the psychological
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 and emotional domains of
individuals
thus
 leading to poor relationships.
Nonetheless
, these difficulties could be significantly tackled and alleviated, if
government
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the government
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 could develop rural territories to fit into an
advance
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 level by constructing viable social amenities
such
 as industries and roads, creations of adequate employment for both skilled and unskilled personnel, and reduction of poverty by subsiding cost and concession of tax for indigent households.
Also
,
individuals
 can contribute by adding worthwhile value to their immediate environment and utilizing every opportunity to develop it. In conclusion, most migrants are seeking
for
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adorable and comfortable premises which profoundly leads to tedious living conditions which could be ameliorated, if government and
individuals
 collaborate to
a workable solutions
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a workable solution
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