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The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. To what extent do you agree?

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The concept of having a single career is becoming obsolete. The next trend will be to have multiple jobs or methods to earn
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, and continuing education will be something that people do throughout their lives.
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 tendency has both advantages and disadvantages, I would write why we should have more than more careers.
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 with, change is inherent in nature, and people should continue to learn in order to achieve in life, 
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, having a side business will allow you to save cash for better plans and live life to the fullest.
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, the future is unknown, so preparing for the worst-case scenario by pursuing a second career is the greatest alternative.
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, Tesla co-founder Elon Musk worked jobs to make enough money to start his own company. Optional revenue sources, of course, are usually beneficial in difficult conditions.
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, and perhaps most importantly, learning is a vicious spiral that never ends until we choose to stop.
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, additional research will increase our skills and bring our focus and dedication to the next level. Even in schools, extracurricular hobbies are taught, and people might find their love in these activities as a secondary source of income.
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, every instructor has multiple jobs,
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 as working full-time for educational institutions and running tutorials to supplement their income. As a result, accumulating cash from multiple sources ensures that our future is secure. In conclusion, we can obviously see that relying on a single source of income is antiquated
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 and that working two operations is the only way to save a significant amount of money.
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, the importance of certain occupations is too great to neglect.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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