Some people believe that individuals are becoming more and more dependent on each other, where as others believe that people are becoming more independent from each other. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

It is considered by some people that nowadays, the human
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becoming more and more
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on each other.While others have opinions that folks have more independents
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others.Before arriving at my position both the sides of
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. why people are
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depended
on a each other.To answer it, the economic problem. To explain it, we know that today's unemployment is
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problem in the world, if folk have no good wages job or a
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business
, they have no option and have to borrow money from
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family members or
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friends for a living.Another one is in recent time student are more
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on their parents along with the online classes for their education without
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tuition
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result.
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, 80% of pupils do
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for study. Some believe that individuals are
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nowadays.To
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it, one is, unexpected gadgets, everyone has
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mobile phone , laptop, computer.Regarding
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they can do
enything
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anything
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.can send or
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receive
the documents through an email.
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with relatives and friends or can arrange online the office meeting from any place.till 2010 ,
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everything
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by the human as the letters or notice
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by the postmen but now it can do person themselves at the house.
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by
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life
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is becoming easy compared to the past. In conclusion,
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the public depend on others for some reasons like money problem
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also
kids
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studies.I
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that getting
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independence
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trend around the world,they can growth themselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interconnected
  • globalization
  • remote work
  • independence
  • dependency
  • specialization
  • professional services
  • social validation
  • individualism
  • self-reliance
  • collective action
  • sustainability
  • global community
  • navigating
  • complexity
  • environmental movement
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