Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them basic assistance such as food and hosing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that rich states should allow more immigrants and support them with essential necessities like food and accommodation. I strongly agree with
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statement because refugees who
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from their
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would definitely bring
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and would enrich the hosting country's culture. Many
people
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think that
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, who
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a new life in a new country, would bring
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instead
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of being beneficial for
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.
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,
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is a misunderstanding issue because most immigrants looking for a new place where they can be productive by running their own business and make a huge improvement on
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.
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, it is believed that many restaurants in London opened by Indian
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which
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many job opportunities for local
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. Another main reason why should rich
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accept immigrants is that they enrich the hosting
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' culture. Many
countries
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have accepted refugees from other
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with different cultural
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,
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would result in being
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between
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and new-comer. For
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, London, where you can find
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from all over the world like Indian cuisines or Iranian cuisines etc., is a multicultural place.
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,
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could know about their food and language
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this cause citizens
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to accept other
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from different
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and become friends in
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place. To conclude, it is
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countries
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responsibilities
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to accept
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newcomers
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new comers
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newcomers
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who left their home, because of conflicts or any related problems, with food and shelter because those refugees would bring productivities as well as
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new county's culture.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refugees
  • Asylum seekers
  • Humanitarian aid
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Economic impact
  • Public services
  • International law
  • Conventions relating to the status of refugees
  • Labor market
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Burden-sharing
  • Resettlement programs
  • Host country
  • Border security
  • Comprehensive policy
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