Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them basic assistance such as food and hosing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that rich states should allow more immigrants and support them with essential necessities like food and accommodation. I strongly agree with
this
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home
would definitely bring Fix the agreement mistake
homes
productivities
and would enrich the hosting country's culture.
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productivity
people
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refugee
, who Fix the agreement mistake
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starting
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the economic
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this
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the economic
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cause
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.
Another main reason why should rich Use synonyms
countries
accept immigrants is that they enrich the hosting Use synonyms
countries
' culture. Many Use synonyms
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with different cultural Use synonyms
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background
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same
place.
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developing
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countries
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countries'
country's
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to accept Fix the agreement mistake
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newcomers
new comers
who left their home, because of conflicts or any related problems, with food and shelter because those refugees would bring productivities as well as Correct your spelling
newcomers
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite