Some people believe that childhood is the best stage of happiness.While others believe that a person can enjoy more happiness in other stages of life? Discuss both views and give your opinion?

It is often argued that
childhood
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is the best phase of being happy, while others disagree and think that other phases of
life
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brings
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more happiness in
people
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lives. In my opinion, I believe that
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other phases of
life
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offer us more freedom which brings
joy
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in our
life
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, overall during
chidhood
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childhood
person stays
more happy
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due to
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life
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. On the one hand, being
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a teenager
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teenager
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teenagers
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and
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an adult
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adult
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offers us more freedom in our
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.
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is because one has to move away from home to
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for studies.
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, students will be no longer under the supervision of
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their parents
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.
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, they meet new friends and explore various things in their
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such
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as they fall
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relationships and
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on solo adventure trips, which brings extreme
joy
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in their
life
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unlike
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childhood
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where one has to live under
parents
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parents'
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restricted environment.
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, during my study in Japan, I have lived the best days of my
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due to my good
friendship
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circle.
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, a great sense of freedom brings more
joy
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in
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our
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.
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, it is often thought that
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childhood
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the childhood
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stage is more
stress free
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. During
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stage
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parents
fulfill
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all the needs and take care of children.
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, they stay
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worry-free
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worry
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free during
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phase, the only thing they care
is
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to just study and play. They do not have to panic about the future and
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leads to extreme happiness in their
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. A recent study concluded that most
of
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the
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people miss their
childhood
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more
in contrast
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to other stages of
life
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.
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,
relaxed
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a relaxed
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environment brings
joy
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in
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to
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childhood
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. In conclusion, despite being
adult
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an adult
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which
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it
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brings a lot of fun in
the
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apply
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people
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people's
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life
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. Personally
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I believe that
childood
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childhood
is the most relaxed phase which showers a lot of happiness.

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