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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps illustrate the information about how Grange
Park
 changed from 1920 to nowadays. Overall, it is clear that the playground almost changed everything apart from two entrances and the rose garden which was on the right-hand side when entered the
park
 from Arnold Avenue in the year 1920. Meanwhile, a new car parking space is established today. Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that there used to have three rose gardens in the
park
 but one of them was removed and the other one that was on the left-hand side when entering the
park
 from Arnold Avenue was replaced by a cafe. The Pond for water plants was
also
 replaced by a Children's play area.
Besides
, the seats were all been removed.
On the other hand
, the stage for musicians was changed to the amphitheatre for concerts and the fountain which is located in the central
park
 was replaced by a new rose garden and four new seats. A new water feature and an underground car
park
 are established today.
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