Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The rules of childrens' education
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always been a highly debated issue. One of the
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debated issues is
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whether oblige
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adolescents
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to do voluntary works or not. Personally, I think suggesting compulsory
work
to
students
can be totally a wrong issue.
Firstly
, children are overloaded by their too much
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homework
, on top of that they have to get prepare for their exams.
Additionally
, schools have limited
students
' time more and more,
thus
children have less and less time to pay together. Unpaid community services can be a waste of time
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students
, too. Nowadays, schools are not enough for success.
For example
, most of the pupils that I know are joining different classes
such
as dance,
second
language, or even extra math classes.
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Handling
those classes
in addition
to schools, is
such
a nightmare to pupils and adding more activities can put the
students
in a worse condition. On the other side,
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volunteer
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works would be
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compulsory occasions.
For instance
, when a student should do a
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volunteer
work
as his duty, he would not enjoy it and that
work
may resent him. To conclude,
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volunteer
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can put
students
under too much pressure and lose
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valuable meaning in
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forced conditions.
However
, I personally, believe that it can not be a good idea to
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students
to
work
more than they should.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • neighborhood improvement
  • teaching sports
  • empathy
  • social justice
  • transferable skills
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • problem-solving
  • civic duty
  • civic engagement
  • educational enhancement
  • practical experiences
  • academic learning
  • real-world applications
  • social cohesion
  • mutual support
  • time management
  • balancing priorities
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