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Some people believe that individuals are becoming more and more dependent on each other, where as others believe that people are becoming more independent from each other. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

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There is no doubt that
people
 used to live in a community for mutual help. But is it important to be always with someone from whom you need help? While some
people
 think that it is not, I agree with the latter argument.
First
 of all, we live in a modern and capitalistic world, full of many religions, principles and lifestyles. Being hardworking and talented enough,
people
 try to do their best to achieve higher goals of having a better life.
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people
 who start working after graduation their universities
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 can spend a lot of their
time
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 so that they can earn enough money for themselves.
As a result
,
people
 tend to spend a lot of their free
time
 being fully concentrated on earning money and getting
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success to be financially independent
from
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 other
people
.
On the other hand
, back to many centuries ago when citizens used to live in big communities in order to stay fed and safe from animals around, it was an initial instinct to be together with others. I would argue that having a big family with many children and being ready to take the responsibility for them is a sign of maturity.
Additionally
,
family
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 gives us
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 of strength and support, which is very essential when the obstacle takes place in life. It could mean that apart from being working hard to achieve their
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life goals
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lifegoals
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,
this
 individual is
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reliable and brave not to be frightened from financial
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crisis
crisises
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 or lack of
time
 for himself. If I would be an employer who meets two specialists, I would definitely hire the one with a big family.  In conclusion, I would like to sum up, that being alone trying to make everything by ourselves could definitely be easier and less costly, but having
people
 around who is ready to support you at any
time
, like having a big family, gives a sense of life meaning.
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