It is importnat for children to learn the diffrence between right and wring at an early age. punishment is necessary to hekp them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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The ability to distinguish right and wrong is necessary for children. Any adolescent needs to learn some important life skills for a better and a

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life. It is believed that

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can be used as a helpful tool for teaching values to students. I strongly disagree with

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because of many reasons.

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, acting in a bad manner with children can ruin their self-

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, punishing a kid would increase his sense of inferiority and grief gradually

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in future he might lose his self-

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mind is as important as being able to recognize bad and good.

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, youngsters need more explanation for a better

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, being noticed about the reasons

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their faults sounds more interesting to them. Teaching adolescents by using

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range of examples and comparisons would be a good alternative to

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, more explanations may lead to more intellectual activities,

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students who are heard more examples would have more active minds which can

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range of details is highly recommended because of its' benefits. To summarise,

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easy tool for teaching norms to students, it has lots of disadvantages for youngsters.

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, not any easy way is the best way. In my

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can be the worst thing for teaching and other ways like

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