If an individual acts in an anti-social way, such as committing the crime, who is to be blamed: society or the individual? What are the causes behind such behaviour? Who should be responsible for this?

If a person commits
crime
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by acting
anti social
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way who is to be
balmed
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blamed
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individual or society.I agree
with
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that an individual is to be blamed.In
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about
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the causes and who is responsible for
this
act.
Firstly
,the individual commits
crime
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a crime
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because of the lack of education.Because if he or she with proper education knows the consequences of
commiting
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committing
crime
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a crime
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.So it leads an individual to commit a
crime
and
thus
leads him
spending
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his or her life in jail.
For
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a recent survey conducted
India
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in India
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showed that
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uneducated people
commited
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committed
commit
more
crime
than
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educated people.
Secondly
,as a consequence of his or
her
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the
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individual life is wasted.
As a
result
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when he enters
the
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society he brings chaos to it. In
conclusion
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the lack of
an
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education
to
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a
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individual leads to
commiting
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committing
crime
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a crime
the crime
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.So an individual is to be blamed for
this
act.
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