Some people prefer to go to health clubs and gyms for health care, some say the walking and climbing stairs are more effective. Discuss both vies and give your opinion.

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Few people think going
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health
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clubs and
gyms
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improve
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and some believe that walking and climbing stairs are beneficial.I personally believe that regular visit
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health
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care
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and
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increases
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I will discuss
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both views and give my opinion.
Firstly
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, the regular visit of
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and
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clubs definitely benefits the
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of a
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.Because by attending
continuosly
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continuously
a gym or
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club where a
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will do lots of
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and gets the diet plan.
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it paves
them
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a way
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for a healthy life.
For
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research conducted by
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University revealed that a
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who visits
gym
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the gym
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and
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care
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regularly has low
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problems.
On the contrary
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doing regular work like climbing stairs and walking
also
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helps significantly in developing
healt
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health
.The reason is by walking and climbing stairs a
person
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burns more calories which keep them fit.So it is beneficial for a
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who has no
for
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time
visiting
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gyms
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and
health
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care
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. In conclusion,as both methods are beneficial for a
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but by visiting
gyms
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and
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care
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a
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will have
high
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improvement in the
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.So
i
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prefer visiting
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and
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clubs for
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care
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