Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football. But others think taking part in individual sports is better, like swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Sport is one of the most significant activities for having a healthy body. A certain number of people believe that playing with the football team is
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of giving the advantages.
Instead
of, others mean, having sport
such
as swimming is best to exercise each person. On the one hand, playing with
team
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the team
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gives more
chance
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the way to
successful
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and win a prize. In
odrer
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order
to, there are several
compitations
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competitions
helds
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held
holds
in many local
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. Over more, these game awards the player to share
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their
happiness when they win in a match.
For example
, some schools
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organise
organised
matches
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between two- classes. In
this
way, teachers encourage children to show their skills and appear their talent during
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sporting time .
Then
, children earn new experiences which
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achieve
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to work better in the future.
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the other hand, some adults prefer to have their own space when they are exercising because they want to feel free.
For instance
, some
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people
are not enough good to swim so, they are shy when they fall into a situation with others who are so good at swimming.
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, in
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too many Muslim countries sharing sports activity are prohibited in their
religion
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rule. to conclude, sport is beneficial for health and everyone has different position related to their social lifestyle. In my opinion, playing with
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aid to make
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a relationship
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relationship
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relationships
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with many
friend
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friends
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and award responsibility
about
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other
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others
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.
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