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Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. hu Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 increase directly in many
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universities
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 believe that international
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is much more
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advantageous
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 for all
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schools
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.
This
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 in detail and provide evidence as to why exchange international
student
 is superior for teenage
school
.
Firstly
, that giving chance for
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 to earn more experience during
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their
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studying
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, that award
school
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 experience to
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their
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 carrier.
Secondly
, help
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student
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students
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 to build up
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their
 personal
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experiment
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 them better
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opportunity
 to raise
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their
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Finally
, learning
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form
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 other subject make
brain
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 wider. In
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teenage
school
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schools
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 can
also
 make some profits
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 beside
to add
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 money to
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 budget.
For example
, teenagers learn other
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 and
tradition
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traditions
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 which aid them to use in several life fields in the future.
On the other hand
, if younger children move to
another countries
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another country
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 sometimes may
also
 force some different trouble with living and learn languages.
For instance
,
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the student
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student
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students
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 may have
defficulties
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difficulties
 to
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connect
 with each other in
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classes
 or may feel alone for
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 -term ;
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be away from
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their
 family. To conclude, comparing between positive and negative both f these
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 have own reason to choose
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their
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decision
designs
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