Nowadays more people are choosing to live with friends or alone rather than with their families. This trend is likely to have a negative impact on communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion
It is true that at
this
time
because of their work or learn pressure , a great of people don't want to live with their families. While some argue that this
is a negative impact on society, I only partly agree with this
statement. Firstly
, you are a worker or officer , you will need more time
for your job. So when you have a
own family or live with your family, you have to care else members, it waste Change the word
your
time
for you. if you live alone, you have more free time
to do it.Secondly
, in job
, it is probably that you want to have Add an article
the job
a job
time
to meet Add an article
a colleague
colleague
or Fix the agreement mistake
colleagues
private
space to relax. In fact, you just have that when you are alone because you must share space life with family members and depend on schedule as don't come back home too late or invite your friends Correct article usage
a private
come
on home and sleep Add the particle
to come
Correct your spelling
overnight
over night
.Correct your spelling
overnight
Beside
that benefits, it Change preposition
Besides
is
Change the verb form
also has
also
have drawback
side.Correct article usage
a drawback
For example
, when you live alone, you will have to pay your own cost living
like electric and water fees. Change preposition
of living
Moreover
, you must find an
accommodation, which is suitable Correct article usage
apply
with
you. Especially, when you Change preposition
for
ill
, relative is who you really need because they can help you in the best way! In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I believe that I only partly agree with that statement and Add a missing verb
are ill
also
have more people agree with me!Submitted by nguyenpqbao0111 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite