Because of the rising cost of the housing, many young people are increasingly being forced to live with their parents into their 30s. Do the advantages of this trend over weigh the disadvantages?

Property prices went up
extreamly
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extremely
,
it
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which
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cause young adults to live with their
parents
even after their 30s.
Although
there
is
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advantages
for
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this
situation
but
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I see
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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outweigh
it
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them
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. Due to a tremendous increase in the housing price, they should prepare some money, at least enough for the down payment.
That is
why living with their
parents
will give them time to save money.
Beside
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, It will decrease the
numbers
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of abandoned houses or
second
houses phenomena (
house
as an asset not for shelter). As I mentioned before, despite the advantages I see more disadvantages in
this
situation. Young people, especially with
small
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family
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families
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, will face
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possibility
posibility
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the posibility
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of unhealthy marriage life. When
parents
live with their laws, they will get more
chance
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chances
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to involve in the family decision, even for small things, too many
opinion
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will create arguments.
Furthermore
, many people
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who live
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live
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living
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with
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in
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same
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house
should consider
minimum
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the minimum
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space requirement per person, so the
house
still become
inhabitable
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an inhabitable
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house
. At
last
, they should calculate the
convinient
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convenient
convenience
of distance between their workplace, school or activity
center
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with their
house
,
mostly
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parents
will reside in
rural
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a rural
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place. In
conclusion
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an increased price of
the
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apply
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housing has
consequence
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consequences
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towards
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on
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the
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a
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young person's life. As a new chapter
begin
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begins
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in their life there must be many
situation
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situations
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that will not suitable for them to still stay with their
parents
.
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