Because of the rising cost of the housing, many young people are increasingly being forced to live with their parents into their 30s. Do the advantages of this trend over weigh the disadvantages?
Property prices went up
extreamly
, Correct your spelling
extremely
it
cause young adults to live with their Correct pronoun usage
which
parents
even after their 30s. Although
there is
advantages Change the verb form
are
for
Change preposition
to
this
situation but
I see Remove the conjunction
apply
disadvantages
outweigh Correct article usage
the disadvantages
it
.
Due to a tremendous increase in the housing price, they should prepare some money, at least enough for the down payment. Correct pronoun usage
them
That is
why living with their parents
will give them time to save money. Beside
, It will decrease the Replace the word
Besides
numbers
of abandoned houses or Fix the agreement mistake
number
second
houses phenomena (house
as an asset not for shelter).
As I mentioned before, despite the advantages I see more disadvantages in this
situation. Young people, especially with small
Add an article
a small
family
, will face Fix the agreement mistake
families
Correct your spelling
possibility
posibility
of unhealthy marriage life. When Correct article usage
the posibility
parents
live with their laws, they will get more chance
to involve in the family decision, even for small things, too many Fix the agreement mistake
chances
opinion
will create arguments. Change to a plural noun
opinions
Furthermore
, many people Correct pronoun usage
who live
live
Wrong verb form
living
with
Change preposition
in
same
Change the article
the same
house
should consider minimum
space requirement per person, so the Correct article usage
the minimum
house
still become inhabitable
Add an article
an inhabitable
the inhabitable
house
. At last
, they should calculate the convinient
of distance between their workplace, school or activity Correct your spelling
convenient
convenience
center
with their Change the spelling
centre
house
, mostly
Replace the word
most
parents
will reside in rural
place.
In Add an article
a rural
conclusion
an increased price of Add a comma
,conclusion
the
housing has Correct article usage
apply
consequence
Fix the agreement mistake
consequences
towards
Change preposition
on
the
young person's life. As a new chapter Correct article usage
a
begin
in their life there must be many Change the verb form
begins
situation
that will not suitable for them to still stay with their Change to a plural noun
situations
parents
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