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Families who do not send their children to government-financed schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the quality of the
education
system
 of a
country
 is crucial since it influences the
development
 of a
country
.
Therefore
, the
government
 put their concern in increasing the quality of
education
 through fund
support
such
 as
taxes
 for
education
system
 needs or building up
government
-financial
schools
 to help children to get the same access to
education
.
However
, it is often argued that families who do not send their kids to state
schools
 should not be required to pay
taxes
. From my perspective, it does not matter whether the
schools
 are
government
schools
 or not,
taxes
 should be paid by every citizen of a
country
. In
this
 essay, I will describe the reasons behind my opinion.
First
 and foremost, tax is not right but mandatory for citizens because it is beneficial for the
development
 of a
country
. It can be the source of a
country
's income.
This
 income can
support
 every part of the
development
 of a
country
such
 as
an
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infrastructure and
education
.
For instance
, tax can help the
development
 of transportation facilitation which
also
 supports children to get to school efficiently.
Moreover
, the
education
system
 in a
country
 can not be better if only the
government
 works for it. The
government
 has only a role in creating a policy for the
education
system
, yet citizens should
support
 it by funding
support
 since every
development
 needs the amount of cost and the sources of that cost are from
taxes
.
For example
, several
government
schools
 were built by tax from the citizen.
This
 kind of school is essential for families with low economic rates because the cost of school is cheaper.
Hence
, indirectly, we help all children to get the same access to
education
. To conclude, I believe that paying
taxes
 is one way to contribute to the
development
 of our
country
, especially in
education
 since it can be a source of income for a
country
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Inequality
  • Socio-economic groups
  • Public good
  • Well-educated population
  • Double payment argument
  • Tax base
  • Infrastructure
  • Qualified teachers
  • Choice and privilege
  • Tax credits
  • Deductions
  • Exempting
  • Public education
  • Funding
  • Resources
  • Collective responsibility
  • Educational quality
  • Directly benefit
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