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Today, many people do not realize how important the natural world is. Why is this? How can people learn more about the importance of the natural world?

#people #world #importance
Nowadays,
people
 start to forget about
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 importance of
nature
.
This
 can
be
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cause
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caused
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 by industrialism and modernity.
This
 essay will discuss
about
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the reasons and solutions od
this
 trend.
To begin
 with, cities began to develop really fast, and
instead
 of trees, that gives us air
people
 now build buildings and facilities. Questions about
nature
 are now being ignored,
people
 think only about how to make
urbans
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urban
 more developed and industrial.
In addition
,
people
 care more about cars, they want the modernist cars that make
air
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the air
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 and
nature
 around them more polluted
that
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 they are.
Also
, cars are causing global warming, everyone should realize that soon they will live in
in
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an oven at
this
 rate. What can individuals do to teach others about
importance
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the importance
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 of
natural
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the natural
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 world? The
first
solutions
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solution
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 – giving lectures, every school,
universities
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university
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 should make a meeting with students about how our planet is dying day
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by
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be
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by
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day
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the day
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. The
second
 one
is advertises
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 on social media and social apps, despite how it sounds, it may be the best and simplest solution. It can reach more
people
pf
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of
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 all ages. Unlike students, older ages have
a
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 power to change
other
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others
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ones
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ones'
one's
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opinion
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opinions
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 about
nature
 and make them realize how is important. In conclusion, now there is an era when individuals do not know the
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principle
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principal
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principle
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 of
environment
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the environment
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. Mother
nature
 is one who
give
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 us everything to exist.
Furthermore
,
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advertises
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advertisers
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 and
lecture
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lectures
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 are the ways to let them understand.
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