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Some people believe that childhood is the best stage of happiness . While others believe that a person can enjoy more happiness in other stages of life. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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People have different thoughts about their happiness.Some think that they enjoyed more in their
childhood
 whereas others opine that individuals can have more fun in their growing stages of
life
. I agree with the formal one and
this
 essay will discuss both views
To begin
 with,
childhood
 memories are the best thought in everyone's soul. Because in our early
life
 most of the people are free from tensions, responsibility etcetera. They are flying like free birds for their whole day. Most children only want to focus on their studies.In that case
also
 sometimes parents help them.
For instance
, after coming from school most of the pupils have the snacks which were prepared by their mother and
then
 they go to play. The little one doesn't want to think about what to do
next
. At night will sleep without any tension and continue the same routine every day.
On the other hand
 ,it is believed that people can enjoy more enjoyment in their adult
life
.As they believe that it is the best time for entertainment because now he or she has all the abilities to do their own work with their self earned money. But when start to receive a salary we are the responsible person for our family.
For example
, they need to look after all things like have to buy Homewood things,want pay children fees, current bill, water bill etcetera. Sometimes they will face more stress if they failed to meet the goal. In my opinion ,I will be with
childhood
 laughter as I had more fun in my early stage.when compared with a later stage. Because in my adulthood my responsibilities became increased and I need to take care of the persons who are depending me to live To sum up, there is an argument among the public about
life
's joy . All growth stages can enjoy more but
childhood
 is the happiest stage than other living stones.
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