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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would be benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree ?

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Nowadays,in some ,countries some people hope
teenagers
 can help the local community in their free time and unpaid it because they believe
this
 would benefit both the individual teenager and society.While in my opinion,I totally disagree with
this
 opinion. There are serval reasons I argue that
teenagers
 should not help the local community without salary.
Firstly
,
teenagers
 have a full-time occupation which is a student.They may have a busy timetable for school subjects,
such
 as math or science or language.
Teenagers
 want to do something they can relax their brain when they have free time
instead
 of volunteer work.
Secondly
,if the volunteer work became mandatory ,secondary students will have no motivation to work in the local community.
Teenagers
 always have a rebellious mentality. In conclusion,
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