Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?

Early childhood diseases
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the major
causes
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of death globally.
Mortality
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rate could be diminished once
vaccination
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the vaccination
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law is abided by the public
however
some parents are against
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vaccination
. On the
first
hand, following the scheduled immunisation chart is imperative
to
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children for
them
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to maintain the optimum health level in
such
a way they will not be easily contracted
by
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different bacteria and viruses.
For instance
, following the implemented rules of government to bring the child
in
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vaccination
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a vaccination
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center
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.
Thus
, it will be good for
the
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humanity since everyone were vaccinated and it will decrease the number of early childhood death.
On the other hand
, some parents preferred not to immunise their
offsprings
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offspring
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because of the side effects that they have had observed in vaccinated
human
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humans
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.
For example
, polio
vaccination
in the Philippines has bad effects
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others
like
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they became crippled;
sufferred
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suffered
their entire life utilizing crutches
likewise
, others became futile.
Consequently
, guardians tend to follow their human instinct not to give their child any form of
vaccines
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vaccine
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, rather they will seclude their child from others.
However
, in the long
run
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the youth will be affected immensely since their immunity is declined. In summary,
vaccination
is crucial to
stablized
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stabilized
childrens' immunity
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to the disadvantages that it may bring. At the end of the day, parents
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the freedom to choose the best for their children
either
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whether
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to get vaccinated or not.
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