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With fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
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 modern world, as well as individuals come home only for sleep, and they have no time for cooking.
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, plenty of individuals
tend
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 to have fast
food
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 for their daily diet. In my opinion, I firmly believe that eating fast
food
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 is not an
adventage
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advantage
things
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, because it makes illness and high cost.
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 with, people’s health issues made by eating too many fast foods. As countless people have long hours working per day, they can only eat outside, so it will impacts their body healthy.
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, some
of
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restaurants
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the restaurants
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 use awful ingredients to make
food
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 which causes sickness.
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, a researcher had an experiment about eating MC for
all day
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 meals, including breakfast, lunch and dinner, for a month. For 30 days, he can not eat other foods only MC, and
then
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 he became grampy, faty and felt hungry easily, while he only eat it for half
month
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.
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, eating outside have huge health problems for people.
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, eating without cooking by ourselves causes huge
cost
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. Since characters work busy for earning money, while they buy
food
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 from outside often, it
maks
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makes
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 large expenditure.
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, they earn
mony
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money
 100
dollar
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 per day, but spent 60
dollar
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dollars
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 for meals, in doing so, they only earn 40
dollar
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dollars
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.
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, if we can make meals by ourselves, it will reduce expenditure, or we will expense great consumption
on
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of
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 foods. To sum up, as we know a great
namber
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number
 of folks, some of them have busy work and others are lazy to cook;
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, they buy fast
food
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 from the restaurants often, impacting their health and causing high cost. So, I argue that the disadvantages supersede the advantages.
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