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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#person #status #possessions #values #honour #kindness #trust
In every era,
people
 always have their own method to sense other
people
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value
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. Some
people
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 that personality attributes
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 not very
influental
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influential
 to describes
people
's worth compared to
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social
status
 and
wealth
 nowadays.
Eventough
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Even though
 it seems like that everywhere, I believe that personal virtue
still
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 considered
as
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 important
factors
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 to decide
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people
 worth. It's common knowledge that the
first
 and easiest way to judge something that you are not familiar with is by observing it with your own eyes. Related to
this
 topic, if you meet someone that you don't know before, their
wealth
 and social
status
 are the easiest criteria to confirm their personal value.
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 a
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,
people
 could easily
said
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 that she or he is
wealthy
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 or
sucsessfull
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successful
 person, but they would find it difficult to directly assume the
ferrari
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owner
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 personality. In another situation,
people
 will easier to accept a word from a
well known
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 family member rather than someone from
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 family. A prestigious family background
give
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 an assurance that of course, could not
given
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 by commoners. In reality,
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people
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 perspectives about everything
also
 changed
trough
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the
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time. If
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wealth
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 and
honorable
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people
 have
advantage
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 in the
first
 impression,
people
's character will play a big role
to
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 how they will
judged
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.
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, wealthy but liar
people
 might be found it is difficult to get
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from
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another
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people
 and could not build a relationship with many
people
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for
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a
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 long term,
the
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personal virtue is the most
influental
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influential
 factor
about
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 how
people
 will judge somebody and how they will treat them.
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, a poor but trustworthy person will be easier to find a job compared to
an
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 douchebag crazy rich. Overall,
wealth
 and social
status
 are important to build
people
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first
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 good impression, but their character will be the one who decided
people
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 values. Off course, it would be ideal if you could have it all,
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status
, richness, and good personality.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social status
  • material possessions
  • old-fashioned values
  • honour
  • kindness
  • trust
  • empathy
  • media influence
  • self-worth
  • metrics of success
  • financial achievements
  • community contributions
  • superficial connections
  • emotional bonds
  • life satisfaction
  • stress and anxiety
  • policy changes
  • community programs
  • restoring balance
  • personal character
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