A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In every era,
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value
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. Some
people
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that personality attributes
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not very
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influential
to describes
people
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social
status
and
wealth
nowadays.
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it seems like that everywhere, I believe that personal virtue
still
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considered
as
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important
factors
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to decide
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people
worth. It's common knowledge that the
first
and easiest way to judge something that you are not familiar with is by observing it with your own eyes. Related to
this
topic, if you meet someone that you don't know before, their
wealth
and social
status
are the easiest criteria to confirm their personal value.
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a
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,
people
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that she or he is
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or
sucsessfull
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successful
person, but they would find it difficult to directly assume the
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owner
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personality. In another situation,
people
will easier to accept a word from a
well known
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family member rather than someone from
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family. A prestigious family background
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an assurance that of course, could not
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by commoners. In reality,
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people
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perspectives about everything
also
changed
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the
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time. If
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wealth
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and
honorable
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people
have
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in the
first
impression,
people
's character will play a big role
to
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how they will
judged
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.
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, wealthy but liar
people
might be found it is difficult to get
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another
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people
and could not build a relationship with many
people
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for
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a
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long term,
the
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personal virtue is the most
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influential
factor
about
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how
people
will judge somebody and how they will treat them.
For example
, a poor but trustworthy person will be easier to find a job compared to
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douchebag crazy rich. Overall,
wealth
and social
status
are important to build
people
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first
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good impression, but their character will be the one who decided
people
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values. Off course, it would be ideal if you could have it all,
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status
, richness, and good personality.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social status
  • material possessions
  • old-fashioned values
  • honour
  • kindness
  • trust
  • empathy
  • media influence
  • self-worth
  • metrics of success
  • financial achievements
  • community contributions
  • superficial connections
  • emotional bonds
  • life satisfaction
  • stress and anxiety
  • policy changes
  • community programs
  • restoring balance
  • personal character
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