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Nowadays families are not as close as they used to be. What do you think are the causes of this? What can be done to make families closer?

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The role of the family and how they bond together is a great concern for most of us whilst some hold the view that it's important to strengthen your relationship with your parents , brothers and sisters, others hold a diverse view that one should stay away from them at a certain age so that they feel more independent . I believe that you should keep the ones that love you unconditionally close to you always. I
also
 think that technology among other reasons is why families lost their communication with each other .My contention will be
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To begin
 with , losing the communication and bond between parents and their
youngesters
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youngsters
 is due to the tremendous effort done in work . Fathers and mothers work so hard to provide for their
kids
. Not only
does
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 they exert a lot of effort but
also
 , they spend a lot of
time
in
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 work . leaving the
kids
 alone most of the day makes the communication and love between them fade with
time
 .
Also
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 technology is one of the reasons for
this
 issue .
For
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 Most
of
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the
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kids
 tend to escape the real world while playing video games and using
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social media.
Moreover
, members of the family should be closer by doing activities together . What can be said is routine must be done to save the connection between the family . Despite the fact that the job takes up all the
time
 , providers should gather with their
kids
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al
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 least once
everyday
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 eating together . A prime example is the weekend
time
 , you can go together to the zoo , museum or even to a small park. In conclusion , It can be reiterated that life is hard without someone who cares about you . Sometimes you need the support and love of
the
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 close ones . Technology and life needs
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 kept us apart and we need to keep the bond between each other to survive .
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