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Nowadays plastic money replacements such as credit and debit cards are extremely popular, even more than banknotes and coins. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, almost everyone uses credit and debit
cards
instead
 of the more traditional forms of
money
such
 as banknotes and coins.
This
 shift in behaviour has resulted in some positive- and negative developments in comparison with the old situation. Hereafter will I come up with some advantages and disadvantages
as a result
 of
this
 change.
Firstly
, it has become easier to bring your capital with you. In the past people needed to bring their wallets filled with a lot of physical
money
.
This
 was because they had to pay, for ,instance their groceries, with
this
 'physical
money
'. The new way of doing transactions by
card
 has resulted in the need for less cash because it is now enough to bring a small
card
 with you.
This
card
 fits
for example
 between your phone and phone case, so it will not take a lot of space.
Furthermore
, the shift in the payment method had
also
 ensured a decrease in criminality on the streets. In the past, there was always a chance that you could be robbed on the street and directly lost all the cash you had taken with you.
This
 is not the case with credit- and debit
cards
. Take as
a template credit
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cards
, If these
cards
 get stolen the robbers can only take a certain amount of
money
 from the
card
.
Next
 to that, at the moment you know that you lost your
card
, you can directly make a call to your bank to block your bank account.
On the contrary
, there is
also
 a disadvantage to
this
 transformation. People will spend
money
 because they do not have the feeling that they are actually spending
money
.
Consequently
, they will spend more than possible.
For instance
, a lot of poor people usually pay with cash. By doing
this
, they have better control over their financial position. In conclusion, the change from physical to digital
money
 has led to more user-friendly applications and had reduced the rate of criminality,
Nevertheless
 can it
also
 lead to financial problems for some households.
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