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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

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Nowadays
transportation
 has become an integral part of people's lives.It is vital that the
transportation
 system will be rapidly changed day by day.
However
,
this
 implementation will great success for new innovation.I believe that
this
 will create a positive
impact
 on society rather than an
anegetive
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negative
impact
.In
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 I will examine the benefits and downsides of
this
 phenomenon and I provide my overall opinion. Generally speaking,people can easily save
their
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time
 while they suffering from the hectic lifestyle that spends most of their valuable
time
 in traffic congestion. Some scholars argue that most
the
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humans spend their
time
 on the roads,but in ,
future
 if scientists implement
driverless
 cars for
transportation
 structures that will save their
time
 and
also
 traffic congestion. As an
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 the USA had already implemented automatic
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 in some areas.as well as that has
great
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benefit
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impact
for
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 society. Unlike in the ,past the traffic congestion less in
future
 that will vanish and flocks will get more
benefit
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to compare
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 to before. Despite these ,arguments there is
also
the
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various advantages the most significant advantage are global accident rate can be reduced in modern more rad active vehicles while most of the accidents that happen around the
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 are based on human errors that are based on
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lack of concentration and carelessness. For
this
reasons
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 all year maximum citizens die from road accidents and some are disabled as well as their valuable vehicles.If the government take
this
 stape
this
 will give more benefit
in
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 the
future
 generation. In conclusion, it must be said that
driverless
transportation
 has clear advantages outway disadvantages.My personal view is that
driverless
 cars will get
more
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 beneficial
impact
for
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 society.
finally
, I believe
driverless
 cars will
impact
 positively on the
future
 generation.

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