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In the future, it seems it will be more difficult to live on the Earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planets to live, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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. Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my interest in studying for the Ontario
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 Graduate Certificate Program “Advanced Manufacturing Management” at
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. My choice of studying
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 course is to improve and understand
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 leadership and management skills in an industrial environment. I am currently working as
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 Mechatronics Engineer, having a total of 5 years of experience out of which 2 years
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 the industrial sector and currently looking forward to moving on to the
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 stage of my career. Having good knowledge
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 electronics, electrical and mechanical designing I was able to achieve any given
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 with innovative ideas, which resulted in better performance. But still looking to learn more and achieve higher places. Recently stepped into the Management area of the Manufacturing sector, I am providing
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 best result in my work. But I can clearly see my lack of technical knowledge in some areas. That’s the reason I choose to study the “Advanced Manufacturing Management” program, which covers the courses which I needed the most. So grant me
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 and to gain knowledge about the program I prefer. Took a virtual campus tour on the
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 website, the
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 of “Advanced Manufacturing and Design Lab” infrastructure gave me a very positive impression that I can be independent to train my skills to my needs. All of the required documents are submitted along with
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 achieve academic excellence. Thank you so much for your time and consideration. I eagerly anticipate receiving an acceptance letter from
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. If you have any questions for me or if I can be of assistance in any way, please let me know. Manoj Premalatha Raju
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