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In some countries,university students live away from home and in another city while studying.Do you think the disadvantage outweighs the advantages?

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An increasing concern for University
students
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 in various
notions
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nations
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 around the world is staying
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in other
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other city
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another city
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 far away from home.In
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i
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 will examine the pros and cons of
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 phenomenon and provide my overall opinion. From an overall
perspective
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 there are a number of
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 for University
students
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 living
another
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in another
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 city without family.One of the most obvious of
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 is
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a student
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student
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students
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 may
out
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be out
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 of
parents
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parents'
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 governance.
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,they are out of control from their parents.
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,they lead
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undisciplined
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undiscipline
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undisciplined
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 life and become disobedient.
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,They not only suffer from healthy food and
hygienic
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a hygienic
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 environment but
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struggling
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struggle
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 with financial issues. On the
flipside
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flip side
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,
stay
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staying
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 away from
own
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your own
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 residents has some
advantage
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advantages
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.Perhaps the main advantage is that
attand
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attend
 the class timely.
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,if any
student
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students
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live
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lives
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 near the university they can their classes without any
hastle
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hassle
.
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,
students
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 can get facilities from
library
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the library
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 and lab etc.
Students
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 feel that they are free from family rules and regulations. To sum up,Having considered both the negative and positive views
living
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of living
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 far away from home.I completely affirm that its disadvantage outweighed its advantages.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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