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The plans show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The plans illustrate the current scenario of
university's
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the university's
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sports
center
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 and how it will be after renovation. Overall, The current
sports
center
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 has few facilities for the student
such
 as
pool
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a pool
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, gym and outdoor courts.
On the other hand
, the proposed development of the
sports
center
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 will have
dedicated
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a dedicated
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 leisure pool and
sports
 hall.
First
 of all, the current plan of the
sports
center
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 has only limited features for students. The
two
 outdoor courts are on the west and east side of the complex. But on the proposed development of the
center
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centre
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 will have a large leisure pool on the west and
sports
 hall on the east.
With
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In
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 addition to the
sports
hall
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 there will
two
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be two
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 dance studio on the east side of the complex.
Secondly
, Now the
sports
center
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 entrance has only a reception area.
On the other hand
, the proposed plan will have one
sports
 shop and one cafe. Alongside those
two
areas
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 there will be
two
 changing rooms on the west and the east side of the complex.
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