Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is well known that many
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issues are caused by overconsumption of
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, which is on many proceed
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. Many
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suggest
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the price
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these
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to discourage consumers from buying them. In my opinion,
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will not solve the problem, but the government should focus on
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's education
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. According to me, making sugary
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expensive is not the appropriate solution, as many
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will suffer from buying even basic foods and drinks.
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sugar
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is a harmful ingredient, it is found in bread or juice, so what will happen if the price of bread increases? Once
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will happen, a large number of families are going to have a hard time buying groceries. A regular family,
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, with two or three kids, which has low income,
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sugary
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, in order to protect
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from
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issues will make them feel stressed to survive
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.
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,
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should be informed about the
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that high levels of
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consumption can cause to their bodies. The government, from
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years, should educate
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schools about
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problems
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due to
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as diabetes, heart
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, obesity etc.
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, pupils will be free to make
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suitable decision for their bodies, provided that they know every consequence of their choice. In conclusion, just making foods and drinks expensive will not only solve the problem
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but will cause more. In my point of view, the best way to encourage
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to consume less
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,
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is by making them choose it by themselves, as long as, they are informed
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the
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problems
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that it can cause, and not
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be imposed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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