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Some countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world. To what extent is this a positive or negative trend?

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All countries plan the number of imports and exports according to their several purposes. So some of them prefer to bring several
food
 products from abroad in order to increase other industrial sectors. I agree with
this
 statement,
however
, some people think it has some bad sides. Some states have to import a huge amount of foodstuff because of their infertile ground, uncomfortable climate and lack of water resources. It is so problematic to make agricultural development, even they spend lots of money and time on it. In
this
 situation import is a single way to provide their people with nourishment and to save drinking water resources for their future generations.
Furthermore
, it is the best solution to provide the population with several seasonal and citrus fruits. If there is winter in your state, some fruits and vegetables are not available to eat. But there is harvest season in other parts of the world. So they supply your
country
 with natural organic products,
however
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 you plant them in greenhouses, but they are not delicious and not healthy like natural eats. But some people agree that because of
this
 strategy
country
 may be dependent on the importer
country
. In
this
situation
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 the government can solve
this
 issue by changing supplying
country
. There are more than 190 countries in the world and half of them are available to export
food
 products.
Also
 according to their viewpoint, if the importer
country
 experiences any natural disasters, it will make your
country
's stability of
food
.
This
 problematic issue can be easily solved by
previous
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 strategy too. In conclusion, emphasizing other sectors
instead
 of the
food
 industry and importing them from other countries can help the government to develop and to avoid
from
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starvation,
,
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however
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 others think it puts
food
 stability in danger.
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