Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Music
has become widespread in the world because of technological advancements. Though, some individuals believe that it is a good way to gather
people
of various cultures and ages together. In my opinion, it’s not true at all times and varies from
music
to
music
. There are some reasons for my disagreement. There are some
people
that are holding strong religious beliefs that think of
music
as guilt. Though, they may be so strict that even open up a fight with whoever listens to
music
. And not all individuals have the same taste in
music
. Like those who live in Asia compared to those who live in Africa.
On the other hand
, there are many types of
music
that are not everyone’s favourite.
In other words
, it simply doesn’t suit different age groups.
Such
as rap and rock
music
which
mostly
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youngsters have been listening to while the elderly
favors
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listen
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classic
music
with more focus on actual instruments rather than digital sounds. On the other side, I agree with the idea that
music
can make stronger bonds between
people
, but in certain conditions.
Firstly
, it must be non-biased. By that I mean, there should not be any type of hate or harassment or showing love to a specific person.
For example
,
music
that is
not biased
,
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is those without singing like Jazz.
In addition
, the National
songs
of each country are one type of
music
that can unite
people
in a country. While we see that
people
in various parts of the country and with different spoken languages sing their countries' National Song with each other and feel encouraged by it.
For instance
, in
Olympics
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we see countries have been singing their National
songs
before the competition starts. In conclusion, there are many types of
music
which
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do not suit everyone.
However
certain
songs
are not biased and
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are favored
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by many, like National
Songs
. I hold an opinion that if the criteria for a song are fulfilled. It can reunite
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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