Some students take one year off between finishing school and going to university, in order to travel to work. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages ?

Children who read academic books develop skills related to their academics in more efficient ways.
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is because they learn
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language and writing along with
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of presenting ideas from books
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are already written by critically acclaimed writers.
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would not only help them in their formal education but
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later in later life for the advancement of their career.
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, it is the need of the time to focus on formal education more than informal, adolescents should
also
develop their imaginative and creative skills by studying books for entertainment and pleasure. It seems fair to say that those materials which provide entertainment and pleasure
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equally important as formal content.
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is because
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reading material includes those imaginative characters which help children to build
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of imagination, which can improve their perception
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the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gap year
  • Academic momentum
  • Practical experience
  • Financial pressures
  • Interim period
  • Soft skills
  • Maturity
  • Independence
  • Career exploration
  • Re-adjustment
  • Social setbacks
  • Informed decision-making
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