in many countries, women are allowed to take maternity leave from their jobs during the first month after the birth of their baby. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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An increasing concern for women in various nations around the world is taking
maternity
leave from their work at the earliest age of their
baby’s
babyhood. In
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I will examine the pros and cons of
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phenomenon and provide my overall opinion. From an overall
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there are two key advantages of
maternity
vacation. A
further
point in favour of
maternity
recess is that
mother
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can give much time for her
baby’s
look after. If a
mother
gets off for a single month from her office, she will get adequate time for her
baby’s
shower,
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breast feeding
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, dress change, oil massage and so on.
In addition
,
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can take rest for her good health as well as her
baby’s
.
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carried out by a journal that about 65%
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women
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from nutrition issues who go to
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after giving a
child birth
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, because
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of ample time they do not eat healthy food and do not take rest properly. On the flip side,
maternity
vacation has numerous drawbacks. One of the most obvious of these is
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will
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her
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work speed and become unfamiliar with new rules and development.
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update their rules and policy which is related to their goals and every employee need to introduce
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, whereas,
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are difficult for the
mother
who was on vacation.
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, when an employee gets off from work there will create a
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vacancy.
As a result
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will suffer much to refill
such
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with
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skilled
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which is really an obstacle
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the enhancement of
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. In conclusion, having considered both the negative and positive views of
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leave policy, I completely affirm that its advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
Submitted by M.L.A on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • maternity leave
  • essential bonding
  • recovery time
  • mental health
  • postpartum depression
  • long-term child development
  • female participation
  • labor force
  • gender equality
  • parental leave
  • economic impacts
  • temporary loss
  • workload
  • small businesses
  • accommodate
  • operations
  • perpetuating
  • gender stereotypes
  • caregiving
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